I am posting a small fragment here. I am interested in
hearing what you think of it. Destructive feedback is
welcome :-P
## She Who Spoke for the Peacebringer
BTW, Calibre seems to create the little page numbers that I
see in the margins of my Kobo too. Maybe it follows the
same 1000chars/pg rule? Anyway.. your text is rendered in 3
pages, not including the cover. So.. for about 3580 chars,
that's about right.
It sounds like it.
It is funny, because it didn't feel like it was 3 pages when
I wrote that segment.
Hello Arelor!
** On Friday 26.02.21 - 16:55, Arelor wrote to All:
I am posting a small fragment here. I am interested in
hearing what you think of it. Destructive feedback is
welcome :-P
## She Who Spoke for the Peacebringer
Stay tuned. I converted it to epub and tossed it to my Kobo. (I
wanted to try that anyway!)
BTW, Calibre seems to create the little page numbers that I see
in the margins of my Kobo too. Maybe it follows the same
1000chars/pg rule? Anyway.. your text is rendered in 3 pages,
not including the cover. So.. for about 3580 chars, that's
about right.
BTW.. How do you pronounce your alias?
Is it R-lor, Ay-lor, Ay-re-lor ..other?
Which syllable gets the emphasis?
Is it R-lor, Ay-lor, Ay-re-lor ..other?
Which syllable gets the emphasis?
The name is intended to be pronounced as it would be read in Spanish.
In English it would be like **R** - re -lor.
I am posting a small fragment here. I am interested in
hearing what you think of it. Destructive feedback is
welcome :-P
## She Who Spoke for the Peacebringer
Hello Arelor!
** On Friday 26.02.21 - 16:55, Arelor wrote to All:
I am posting a small fragment here. I am interested in
hearing what you think of it. Destructive feedback is
welcome :-P
## She Who Spoke for the Peacebringer
READ.
It's a bit hard to criticize the writing since it is such a
short snippet.
But one glaring issue stood out; an incomplete sentence:
"A sempiternity of everlasting imprisonment for murdering one
of the Death God's vassals.
Another thing:
"Whiteberry straightened up slowly. Then, without uttering a
single sound, she flashed out of the room.
I was wondering how "flashed out" was supposed to be envisioned
in my imagination. Was it akin to "beam me up Scottie?". Was it
a high-speed sprint?
The name is intended to be pronounced as it would be read in Spanish.
In English it would be like **R** - re -lor.
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